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The following appeared in the opinion column of a financial
magazine.
"On average, middle-aged consumers
devote 39 percent of their retail expenditure to
department store products and services, while for younger consumers the average
is only 25 percent. Since the number of middle-aged people will increase dramatically
within the next decade, department stores can expect retail sales to increase
significantly during that period. Furthermore, to take advantage of the trend,
these stores should begin to replace some of those products intended to attract
the younger consumer with products intended to attract the middle-aged consumer."
Discuss how well reasoned... etc.
Sample essay 1:
The argument that department retail sales
will increase in the next 10 years and thus department stores should begin to
replace products to attract middle-aged
consumers is not entirely logically convincing, since it omits certain crucial
assumptions
First of all,
the argument ignores the absolute amount of retail expenditure of middle-aged
and younger consumers devoted to department
store products and services. Although younger consumers spend a smaller
percentage of their retail expenditure to department
store products than do the middle-aged consumers, they might actually spend more
in terms of the absolute
amount. Even
if middle-aged consumers are spending more than younger ones in department
stores, the argument ignores the possibility that the
trend may change within the next decade. Younger consumers might prefer to shop
in department stores than in other types of stores,
and middle-aged consumers might turn to other types of stores, too. This will
lead to a higher expenditure of younger consumers in department stores than that
of middle-aged consumers.
Besides, the
argument never addresses the population difference between middle-aged consumers
and younger ones. Suppose there are more
younger consumers than the middle-aged ones now, the total population
base of younger consumers will be bigger
than that of the middle-aged ones if both
of them grow at the same rate in the next decade. Thus there will be a bigger
younger consumer base.
Based on the reasons I listed above, the
argument is not completely sound. The evidence in support of the conclusion does
little to prove the conclusion since it
does not address the assumptions I have already raised. Ultimately, the argument
might have been more convincing by making
it clear that the absolute population of middle-aged consumers are higher than
that of the younger consumers and the
number will continue to grow in the next decade, and that the middle-aged
consumers will continue to spend more money in department
stores than younger consumers do in the next decade.
Sample essay 2:
The argument that retailers should replace
some of the products intended to attract the younger consumers with products
intended to attract the middle-aged
consumers is not entirely logically convincing, since it ignores certain crucial
assumptions.
First, the
argument omits the assumption that the business volumes of both the middle-aged
consumers and the younger consumers are
the same. If the business volume of the middle-aged consumers� 39% is smaller
than that of the younger consumers� 25%, the retail sales
will not increase during the next decade.
Second, even if the business volumes of both
the middle-aged consumers and the younger consumers were the same in the last
decade, the increase of the middle-aged
people in the next decade is not the same as the increase of the retail
expenditure, for the retail trade depends
more on such factors as the economic circumstances, people�s consuming desire.
Finally, the argument never
assumes the increase of the younger consumers within the next decade. If the
younger consumers increase at the same
rate and spend the same amount of money on the goods and services of department
stores, the retailers should never ignore
them.
Thus the argument is not completely sound.
The evidence in support of the conclusion that the growing number of middle-aged
people within the next decade does little
to prove the conclusion that department stores should begin to replace some of
their products to attract the middle-aged
consumers since it does not address the assumptions I have already raised.
Ultimately, the argument might have been
strengthened by making it clear that the business volumes of both types of
consumers are the same and comparable, that the
increase of a certain type of consumers are correlated with the increase of the
retail sales, and that the growth rate of the younger consumers
are the same as that of the middle-aged consumers.
Sample essay 3:
Based on an expected increase in the number
of middle-aged people during the next decade, the author predicts that retail
sales at department stores will increase
significantly over the next ten years. To bolster this prediction, the author
cites statistics showing that middle-aged
people devote a much higher percentage of their retail expenditure to
department-store services and products than younger
consumers do. Since the number of middle-aged consumers is on
the rise and since they spend more than
younger people on department-store goods and services, the author further
recommends that department stores begin to adjust their inventories to capitalize
on this trend. Specifically,
it is recommended that department stores increase their inventory of products
aimed at middleaged consumers and decrease
their inventory of products aimed at younger consumers. This argument is
problematic for two reasons.
First, an
increase in the number of middle-aged people does not necessarily portend
an overall increase in department-store
sales. It does so only on the assumption
that other population groups will remain relatively constant. For example, if
the expected increase in the number of
middle-aged people is offset by an equally significant decrease in the number of
younger people, there will be little or no net gain
in sales.
Second, in recommending that department
stores replace products intended to attract younger consumers with products more
suitable to
middle-aged consumers, the author assumes
that the number of younger consumers will not also increase. Since a sizable
increase in the population of younger
consumers could conceivably offset the difference in the retail expenditure
patterns of younger and middle aged consumers,
it would be unwise to make the recommended inventory adjustment lacking evidence
to support this assumption.
In
conclusion, this argument is unacceptable. To strengthen the argument the author
would have to provide evidence that the population of
younger consumers will remain relatively constant over the next decade.
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